Review as of Chapter 45
For these kinds of stories, I expect the protagonist to experience challenges and set backs. Other than pre-reincarnation, everything seems like a walk in the park for the protagonist. So far, he has been in 3 cities. It seems like he is much stronger than every knight he meets. His fights with monsters are so short, that they are only a couple of sentences or happen in the background. He gains cool abilities that he doesn't need (if he does use it, the author needs to emphasize it more in the fights. Again, the fights are too short). He gets gifted a great horse and armor due to a misunderstanding. He gains fame and fortune without having to sacrifice anything. He gets great subordinates by either talking, fighting with or simply existing. You would expect the protagonist would be ostracized due to his pale vampire skin, but, guess what, he is so handsome that men and women swoon over him. You would expect a vampire who, as far we know, doesn't have any sword fighting lessons to be bad at fighting, but he seems to possess both technique and strength to beat trained knights. The motivation for the protagonist to get stronger is not developed well either. In his previous life, he gets killed by knights. Is he vengeful? Is he apprehensive (maybe the knights that killed him are super powerful)? Is he looking up their information? The author doesn't mention much of anything that is meaningful.
At chapter 45, we do get our first villain, but he seems like a noble having a temper tantrum rather than a full blown villain that could endanger the protagonist. Even the villain's subordinates respect the protagonist after getting beaten.
I expected a much more lone wolf sort of story. It can start off with some sort of resentment with knights/humans. Something simple like family getting hunted/killed by knights. It should have proper emotional character development for the protagonist. Start off with blind hatred and develop towards a resolution as he finds nicer humans. He should possess a vampire's strength and healing, but he should still have trouble fighting properly trained knights until he fights enough people or finds a teacher. He should have issues cooperating with humans and living in a human city. He can start off as a mercenary to find more monsters cores. Each fight in the dungeon should be more hard fought (easy when he can use brute strength, and difficult when he needs technique/better equipment/team work). There should be a looming threat that if anybody pays close attention to him, they might discover he is a vampire. He can find comrades that doesn't care or doesn't know that he is a vampire. To follow along with the current story, he can eventually realize that the best way to take revenge is to become a roaming knight.
Overall,
Story 5/10
Character 5/10
Action 1/10
Review as of Chapter 45
For these kinds of stories, I expect the protagonist to experience challenges and set backs. Other than pre-reincarnation, everything seems like a walk in the park for the protagonist. So far, he has been in 3 cities. It seems like he is much stronger than every knight he meets. His fights with monsters are so short, that they are only a couple of sentences or happen in the background. He gains cool abilities that he doesn't need (if he does use it, the author needs to emphasize it more in the fights. Again, the fights are too short). He gets gifted a great horse and armor due to a misunderstanding. He gains fame and fortune without having to sacrifice anything. He gets great subordinates by either talking, fighting with or simply existing. You would expect the protagonist would be ostracized due to his pale vampire skin, but, guess what, he is so handsome that men and women swoon over him. You would expect a vampire who, as far we know, doesn't have any sword fighting lessons to be bad at fighting, but he seems to possess both technique and strength to beat trained knights. The motivation for the protagonist to get stronger is not developed well either. In his previous life, he gets killed by knights. Is he vengeful? Is he apprehensive (maybe the knights that killed him are super powerful)? Is he looking up their information? The author doesn't mention much of anything that is meaningful.
At chapter 45, we do get our first villain, but he seems like a noble having a temper tantrum rather than a full blown villain that could endanger the protagonist. Even the villain's subordinates respect the protagonist after getting beaten.
I expected a much more lone wolf sort of story. It can start off with some sort of resentment with knights/humans. Something simple like family getting hunted/killed by knights. It should have proper emotional character development for the protagonist. Start off with blind hatred and develop towards a resolution as he finds nicer humans. He should possess a vampire's strength and healing, but he should still have trouble fighting properly trained knights until he fights enough people or finds a teacher. He should have issues cooperating with humans and living in a human city. He can start off as a mercenary to find more monsters cores. Each fight in the dungeon should be more hard fought (easy when he can use brute strength, and difficult when he needs technique/better equipment/team work). There should be a looming threat that if anybody pays close attention to him, they might discover he is a vampire. He can find comrades that doesn't care or doesn't know that he is a vampire. To follow along with the current story, he can eventually realize that the best way to take revenge is to become a roaming knight.
Overall,
Story 5/10
Character 5/10
Action 1/10
